Thinner Than Water [FLASH FICTION]

Hey folks, inspired by lovethebadguy, I’ve decided to try and flex creative with the Trifecta writing challenge.

Their rules are basically as follows:

Each Monday at 10:00 AM Eastern Time, a one-word prompt will be posted on our home page. The chosen word will come from the Merriam Webster’s Online Dictionary. For the Trifecta Writing Challenge, we will always use the THIRD given definition. Please note the definition—we’re likely asking you to use the word in a different way than you typically do.

You should write a creative response using the given word. You must use the word, in its correct form, in your response. Your response can be no fewer than 33 and no more than 333 words. 

trifecta-blog-banner3-currentThis weeks word is “Blood“.

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He had been preparing for months. A part of him even felt like he had been preparing for this his entire life.

Everything he had been through led inexorably to this and in an hour, he would be ready. Then the world and history would know him and remember his name – no more would he be made a mockery of amongst his peers.

Suddenly a crash came from upstairs. Had someone broken into the house? No, he could not afford distractions, not now, and he definitely could not afford to have the police in his house on the off-chance that they would find this laboratory in his basement.

Picking up his fathers old revolver he slowly made his way up the stairs, trying to keep sound from the old stairs to a minimum. Stopping at the door he listened but heard nothing distinctive – perhaps he was lucky and it was just outside or just some punk kid throwing a stone at his window. He gently turned the handle and stepped out into the kitchen. Just as he stepped past the door, a pair of huge men in black gear came charging around the corner and tackled him, his gun going off in a resounding “BANG” and killing his poor defenceless microwave.

Moments later he was hand-cuffed and being half-led, half-dragged out of his own house. Among the few people outside he saw several policemen and in their midst, a face that caused the blood to drain from his face.

“How could you?!” he shouted, “You’re my own blood!”

“Maybe that is so.” said the face from the crowd, “But what you were planning, what you believe now, makes you my brother no more.”

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I hope you enjoyed that teeny-tale, will be trying my hand at this in the coming weeks so hopefully I’ll get better!

In the meantime, as a new participant of the trifecta challenge, they ask quite nicely for us to answer a couple of questions which I’m going to do right here:

What is your name (real or otherwise)?

My real name is Akshay Dhar from India, but around here I’m simply Spider or Spider42.

Describe your writing style in three words.

Surreal, evocative, entertaining. (At least I like to think so!)

How long have you been writing online?

Since 2003 on and off, but the early years saw bursts of regularity – ever since moving from blogger to wordpress a while back, I’ve been far more regular and unlike before have started actively posting my original fiction online.

Which, if any, other writing challenges do you participate in?

InMon by bekindrewrite.com and Andy’s Two For Tuesday Challenge by “Andy’s Words & Pictures”.

Describe one way in which you could improve your writing.

Be more consistent in not just starting stories or ideas but actually following through and finishing them properly.

What is the best writing advice you’ve ever been given

Write. Just write.

Who is your favorite author?

Philip K. Dick. I have many who vie for that spot but his versatility, range and depth are what I would aspire to someday even come close to achieving.

How do you make time to write?

With great difficulty. Partly because there are other things that get in the way but in fairness also because I have a very pronounced procrastination streak sprinkled with bouts of laziness.

Give us one word we should consider using as a prompt. Remember–it must have a third definition.

Drain.

Direct us to one blog post of yours that we shouldn’t miss reading.

Any and all of my short fiction that you would be willing to try out – I live in a place where I have little exposure to the outside world of writers and such beyond online and I CRAVE any and all feedback, advice, criticism, anything. You can find them all HERE or follow the link at the top of the page – same result! 🙂

Cheers!

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24 thoughts on “Thinner Than Water [FLASH FICTION]

  1. I was nervous when I started reading. My imagination has a way of running ahead of me and when I saw the prompt I started considering a number of possibilities. I liked your teeny story, very crazy genius trying to take over the world.
    This isn’t a critique so much as an inquiry. Do you read your dialogue out loud? The brother’s response makes me ask because of how it flows. Reading it out loud may make it smoother. Hope that’s okay to suggest.

    1. Nervous? That should be a good thing, if you’re right, it’s awesome and if you’re wrong then you get surprised which is something that doesn’t always happen unless something is well-written. 😉
      And thanks, I had a moment of inspiration with this one (and folks seem to clearly like it!).
      As I’ve said before – if it’s constructive at all, critique away on anything and everything I write! Please! 🙂 But to answer you: no, I don’t often read it out loud unless something feels off as I’m writing it. But your suggestion is good and I might from hereon – regarding the brothers response, I’ll look back at it but the melodramatic-y and all was intentional. Will see if I can make it come off any better though. Thanks!

  2. It could be current events lately, but I see the character as someone who is making a bomb. If that’s the case, I certainly applaud his blood for turning him in.

    1. Well your assumption is basically correct – he’s making something bad. What it is, I choose not to specify and his exact motivation and/or target is also left undefined because I felt this way different folks can put different spins on what it could be and I like that in my reading material sometimes. 🙂
      Thanks for coming by, hope to see you around more often.
      Cheers!

    1. Yeah, that was an in-the-moment thought, felt the story needed a moment of levity somehow. 🙂
      Thanks for reading and hope to see you around!

    1. Thank you, thank you… I’m trying to write more and more regularly and such and taking on multiple prompts that I like is a good way to keep me on the ball.
      Glad you liked it, will be checking out yours after this comment is typed… now! ;D
      Cheers! (now!)

  3. I think a lot of folks are going to like the “killed the microwave” line. That was a good one. The humour in it was a good counter-balance to the tension of the rest of your piece. It does sound very “Boston Marathon-ish” and that is alright. We all often draw the inspiration for our work from the real events of our lives. You did a good job with this story. Welcome aborad, matey!!! 🙂

  4. Reminds me of the bombings in Boston, and what might have happend if the younger brother had stood up to the older. Good story with nice little details sprinkled throughout (and welcome to Trifecta!)

    1. I honestly don’t know for sure if that being in the news really influenced me, but I can’t say it didn’t for sure.
      Glad you enjoyed it, I’m so kicked that folks seem to be liking this!

  5. I loved the defenseless microwave, Brilliant idea, and brilliant placement! The idea of a basement laboratory made me think meth, but the “planning” made me think of the Boston Marathon bombing. You’re writing is exciting, can’t wait to read more!

    1. As I said to another commenter, it could be either of those, even I’m not sure! 😀
      I write with 2 different prompts already and trifecta makes three so you should get more soon and hopefully at least partially as exciting/entertaining. 😉

  6. I like the way your story unfolded with the tension level notching up by the minute & I am totally with the brother-no man worth his salt would stand back and watch silently-bravo to such a human being!Am just sorry for the poor microwave-got in the way unknowingly;-)(gehoon ke saath ghun bhi pis jata hai kinds,no?)

    And hey,welcome to Trifecta:-)

    1. I know what you mean. I’m not a proponent of violence or war but I also realise a reality of the world we live in makes it always a possibility.
      But everything has a time and a place and reason and some things are just wrong and hurting innocents is one of them.
      Thanks, glad you liked it! 🙂 (and it was a gehoon thing, poor micro… wrong place, wrong time…)

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